Most of my day job involves watching people acting, making notes, and advising them on where they could improve. This week I gave myself the same treatment, by watching the video back from the 4th of December. Here are my notes...
49 mins long
Saxophone skipped at beginning
Chin - posture
Watch out for covering Bobby Cool's legs
Make sure braces are on properly
Find a better response to the mention of Keith Richards
Look at brain on the word bottle - It's kind of weird having a guy here with a BOTTLE in front of him.'
Adjust hat - piano still going and acted surprised - this worked, keep it.
Asking why - too much emphasis
Don't throw away weather report - keep momentum
Take the light out of the brain slower
Slow down the light drawings
Sort hair out
Have pen in the pocket already - set up for beginning, put it back in right place after opener
Nightmares go away, leave more pause after
Suprise lobotomy worked - person next to whomever is holding the brain - almost pounce on them
Check on the healing process later
Need better underwear - find some new quotations for the undressing part
Shipwreck
Trauma Drinking to Lost in Harbour - look at the transition.
Make new clasp for dress - quicker fastening
Shoulders back more for the ice-pick reveal
Have a sexier look, then smile
Watch out for chin on the shoulder stroke
Bottle
Shoulders back on Tit Tape and a Tiara
Find it in the dark, actually go searching for the lost pastie, until I find in the dark and switch the lights off. Look in Tom's hat.
Can we see the shadow during the lamppost story. Bring a brain light to the desk, and walk back with it to light the lamppost.
Good pacing
Look back at the lamppost during bringing up the lights at the desk
Too much stomping in the heels - practise walking
Too much fiddling with coat
Keep the flourish of the ice-pick, mirroring the lobotomy image from before.
Murder good - DBS
Check on the patient to deflect from the tension build from asking for volunteers
Too long a pause before other side - work on this transition
Disintegration
Stumbling with the skirt works
Start showbiz and apocalypse straight away
Slow hat on ascent
More sharp movement in beginning of late night conversation
Look at pacing
Lower hat on hurt
More prep for 2nd part of lip-synch
Too much swaying during improv
Works putting doctor
Gone tone for 3rd doctor
Consequences, learn lines better
Last bit of speech after CIA learn better
Need a better transition after 3rd doctor
Swig after 1st line of soar dirge
Physical prep before story/myth - draw shapes?
Extraordinary
Turn Pete's bow tie off, during story, some point after twinkling lights
Work on singing
Bobby Cool smokes 1st, can he throw the fag away? Looking up to the sky...
Lots to work on here...
I've also been moved to write new material, possibly not for the show, but something in definitely cooking! Here is one:
I'll blame the moon
Right out of the sky for you baby
It's the thorn in our sides
Please call me baby
I'll blame the moon
Stuck up there in the sky
Teetering there on the edge
Of a coloured wind sky
I'll blame the moon
For the severance in my heart
For I can barely walk
Since you have stolen mine heart
Xxx
49 mins long
Saxophone skipped at beginning
Chin - posture
Watch out for covering Bobby Cool's legs
Make sure braces are on properly
Find a better response to the mention of Keith Richards
Look at brain on the word bottle - It's kind of weird having a guy here with a BOTTLE in front of him.'
Adjust hat - piano still going and acted surprised - this worked, keep it.
Asking why - too much emphasis
Don't throw away weather report - keep momentum
Take the light out of the brain slower
Slow down the light drawings
Sort hair out
Have pen in the pocket already - set up for beginning, put it back in right place after opener
Nightmares go away, leave more pause after
Suprise lobotomy worked - person next to whomever is holding the brain - almost pounce on them
Check on the healing process later
Need better underwear - find some new quotations for the undressing part
Shipwreck
Trauma Drinking to Lost in Harbour - look at the transition.
Make new clasp for dress - quicker fastening
Shoulders back more for the ice-pick reveal
Have a sexier look, then smile
Watch out for chin on the shoulder stroke
Bottle
Shoulders back on Tit Tape and a Tiara
Find it in the dark, actually go searching for the lost pastie, until I find in the dark and switch the lights off. Look in Tom's hat.
Can we see the shadow during the lamppost story. Bring a brain light to the desk, and walk back with it to light the lamppost.
Good pacing
Look back at the lamppost during bringing up the lights at the desk
Too much stomping in the heels - practise walking
Too much fiddling with coat
Keep the flourish of the ice-pick, mirroring the lobotomy image from before.
Murder good - DBS
Check on the patient to deflect from the tension build from asking for volunteers
Too long a pause before other side - work on this transition
Disintegration
Stumbling with the skirt works
Start showbiz and apocalypse straight away
Slow hat on ascent
More sharp movement in beginning of late night conversation
Look at pacing
Lower hat on hurt
More prep for 2nd part of lip-synch
Too much swaying during improv
Works putting doctor
Gone tone for 3rd doctor
Consequences, learn lines better
Last bit of speech after CIA learn better
Need a better transition after 3rd doctor
Swig after 1st line of soar dirge
Physical prep before story/myth - draw shapes?
Extraordinary
Turn Pete's bow tie off, during story, some point after twinkling lights
Work on singing
Bobby Cool smokes 1st, can he throw the fag away? Looking up to the sky...
Lots to work on here...
I've also been moved to write new material, possibly not for the show, but something in definitely cooking! Here is one:
I'll blame the moon
Right out of the sky for you baby
It's the thorn in our sides
Please call me baby
I'll blame the moon
Stuck up there in the sky
Teetering there on the edge
Of a coloured wind sky
I'll blame the moon
For the severance in my heart
For I can barely walk
Since you have stolen mine heart
Xxx
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