Despite having forgotten an important prop (again), the show went well. I will always ask friends for feedback and suggestions, and I'm grateful for any they are able to give. It was filmed....I can't bring myself to watch it yet, even though it's been nearly a week, but I know I need to in order to get any sort of concrete idea of how to move forward with this performance.
Here are some audience comments;
* There are more ways to perform each piece, you are already experimenting with different tones, but you could push this further.
* Several props are only used once, can more be reintroduced? Loved the black hole dress, can this be used again?
* You are much more relaxed than you were in the preview, you're much easier to watch now!
* The structure is great, it's really well-paced.
* Enjoyed the ship poem, like the fantastical language.
* Good use of voice.
* The letter is a nice addition, is helps to tie a story together.
I was thinking about the structure of the show this week, as a few people had mentioned it to me on Sunday, and I remember very early in my process that a loose structure had presented itself to me in the form of various costumes. I knew that I would need to get dressed and undressed several times in order to visually show the structure as I had seen it. I 'tried to represent the different characters that appear time and time again in Tom Waits' songs, and later on as the show developed into being more about the human psyche, it became about the different stages of recovery.
These were: Black Hole, Beatnik, Crow, Red Dress, Jet Trash, Gun Street Girl and Traveller. I've needed to find ways of representing each personified theme, and moving between them throughout the show. They also represent the stages of grief, not always in this order: Denial, Anger, Barginning, Depression and Acceptance. The doctor character was added much later in the process, and is the only character that appears more than once, as a motif - but I hope developing in content as the show continues.
It reminds me of how Camille O'Sullivan transforms herself throughout her stage shows, and the various costumes and characters she inhabits, tying in with the songs she's singing. I didn't realise this until this week, but I've been influenced by the structure of her shows from all those times I went to see her perform in London and Edinburgh, probably from 2009 to 2015. She used to enter the stage very mysteriously, wearing a long black cape, rip off most of her clothes at some point early on, and then later would put on very pale, almost clown-like makeup. By the end of the show she would be stumbling barefoot around the stage with her hair loose. The first time I saw her at the Edinburgh Fringe in 2009 I was blown away. I probably would have passed the show by had my friend not pointed out to me in the program that she did cover versions of Tom Waits songs. There aren't many good videos of her on youtube, and I think she's really worth seeing live. I think I should go and watch myself on video now, this will be painful...